Breaking Down Scene Structure into Bite-Sized Bits

I could spend a year discussing scene construction. I give a workshop on this topic, and the last time I taught it (in Phoenix, AZ), I got through about half the material in a total of six hours of instruction. Needless to say, we won’t be spending months on this topic, although it would be justified.

I mentioned last week that the greatest issue I come across while critiquing and editing more than two hundred partial and complete manuscripts a year is this: poor understanding and execution of scene structure. Why is scene structure so important? Can’t a writer just tell his plot any way he wants? Sure. As I said last week (and many times before), a writer can do whatever he wants. Doesn’t mean he’ll succeed.

Scenes Must Move the Story Along

There are lots of ways to construct a scene, but most people will agree there is one main objective for a scene, and that’s to “move the story along.” I put that in quotes because it’s vague. Yes, we want to move the story along, bit by bit, one scene at a time. But that should raise some questions. How many “bits” should you reveal in each scene? How long should a scene be? Where should you start a scene and when should you end it? Okay, just what does it mean to “move the story along”?

I’d love to answer all these questions, and since I’ve covered so much of this in many posts in my Heart of Your Story course on this blog in 2012, I would like to encourage you to read through them, starting with this one, to get all those questions answered. I don’t want to take the time to reiterate it all here, but instead want to give you some basic “rules” (don’t get me started on the rule bit again!) about scene structure. (And if you don’t want to read all this one post at a time online, the posts are now compiled and out in book form! You can buy Writing the Heart of Your Story here on Kindle, Nook, and other formats.)

I mentioned my favorite definition of a scene last week, given by Jordan Rosenfeld in her excellent writing guide Make a Scene. Let’s take a look at it again, and then break it down. And then I’m going to give you a cool, free additional checklist that you can use (one I created for my scene workshop). This will be a bonus checklist in addition to the inspection checklist you’ll get at the end of our coverage of this fifth pillar of novel construction—Plot and Subplots in a String of Scenes.

The Essential Characteristics of a Scene

Here’s the definition:

“Scenes are capsules in which compelling characters undertake significant actions in a vivid and memorable way that allows the events to feel as though they are happening in real time.”

So let’s break it down:

  • Capsule: The word capsule implies a limited, compressed period of time. Scenes start in one moment, in present action and move forward in real time, then end—without breaking up the scene into other times, places, or POVs.
  • Compelling characters undertaking significant actions: Scenes need to feature compelling characters, all of whom must have significant impact on the protagonist, acting as either an ally (reflection character), a romance interest, or an antagonist. All should have core needs and goals that either help or hinder the protagonist from reaching her goal. And the protagonist’s actions in a scene must also be important in relation to her goal.
  • Vivid and memorable: Use as much sensory detail in a scene to bring it to life without bogging down with too much unnecessary description. And what makes a scene memorable is giving it a high moment—which reveals something essential about the characters and/or plot.
  • Happening in real time: Backstory, long flashbacks, and excessive narration stop the present action and interrupt the pacing and flow of the scene. Author intrusion is jarring and unwelcome. Just show, don’t tell, events happening as they happen. Briefly summarize what isn’t important enough to show but needs to be conveyed.

If you’ve been reading my blog these last few years or have attended any workshops I’ve taught, you will be very familiar with my emphasis on the “high moment” in a scene. Great stories have great moments, and great writers will put out the effort to ensure that every single scene in their novel has a high moment or point the scene is making. Usually that means starting your scene just a little bit before that high moment and building to it.

In my course online last year, on this blog (so you can go back and read all these posts at any time), writers learned to “shoot” their novel using cinematic technique. Every scene in a film is specifically built out of camera shot segments to lead to the high moment in that scene. If you learn nothing else from me, learn this: your scene must have a point to it or it shouldn’t be in your novel.

Learn Scene Structure by Asking Questions

My advice for all writers: take the time to really learn scene structure. Study great writers who know how to do this well. Observe at what point in time they begin the scene. See how they build to a high moment, then end the scene. Figure out how much time passed during that scene. Notice how the scene is shown through the POV character, and how the action is moving in real time, in the present, leaving out unessential or boring information that does not help to reveal character or plot.

Take a look at your scenes. There are a number of key questions you can ask about your scene to know if it’s really structured well. I put these questions together in a checklist so that writers can analyze each scene in their novels and see if they “hold up.”

Writers don’t need to wing it or guess or hope their scenes are structured correctly. Just as in novel construction, there are time-tested rules to ensure a powerful scene. If you construct your scenes with strong “materials” and string them together smoothly in time (which we’ll explore next week), you will provide the proper framework for your plot and subplots.

Here’s your bonus scene structure checklist:

https://www.livewritethrive.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/04/Scene-Structure-Checklist.pdf

Got any thoughts about this definition of a scene? Does it help you now understand better how to design your scenes to tell your story? Share some insights!

Inspection checklists:

Inspection Checklist 1-concept with a kicker

Inspection Checklist 2-protagonist with a goal

Inspection Checklist 3-conflict with high stakes

Inspection Checklist 4-theme with a heart

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13 Responses to “Breaking Down Scene Structure into Bite-Sized Bits”

  1. Michael Tevlin June 25, 2014 at 8:02 am #

    As always, your post is extremely helpful. We must become masters of scene, because scene is where the rubber meets the road in fiction writing. Two of my favorite authors who master scene are Anne Tyler, Barbara Kingsolver and Raymond Carver. And in classic literature, the ones I’m most familiar with who are great scene-makers are Hemingway and Chekov. Does anyone else have any other recommendations for whom to study as models of scene-making?

    • cslakin June 25, 2014 at 9:41 am #

      Those are some of my favorites too (except for Hemmingway, since I really don’t like his books!). There are terrific authors that really master scene structure. I think George Martin (Game of Thrones) is an excellent author to study for structuring perfect scenes that start right in action and build to a high moment. He’s quite the expert in it. Elizabeth George is also great and I highly recommend her writing craft book Write Away to learn more about that.

  2. Shawny Lou June 25, 2014 at 8:23 am #

    I always look forward to reading your posts. I walk away having learned so much. This post, in particular, is one of my favorites! It answered some very direct questions I’ve been asking myself about the novel I’m writing.

    The attached checklists … AMAZING!

    I almost feel guilty for reading this post and receiving the checklists without paying a tuition fee.

    You are a gem to me! Thank you!

    • cslakin June 25, 2014 at 9:39 am #

      Thanks so much. Well, you can always pay me if you like (just kidding). But I would encourage you to buy my books, especially my new release drawn from the year-long course I did on this blog in 2012: Writing the Heart of Your Story. It just came out yesterday! I feel the info in there has everything a writer needs to know how to write a great novel.

  3. Beth Havey June 25, 2014 at 1:01 pm #

    Thank you so much for the new checklist. And also for the Who/Whom info. Always enjoy and benefit from your posts. Beth

  4. The Noveling Novice June 26, 2014 at 12:06 am #

    Thank you for an excellent post. I stumbled across it just as I needed it: I’m currently revising my first draft of a novel. I knew some of the scenes were missing something, and your checklist really cleared it up.

    Something that stood out to me was that while most scenes had a ‘high moment’, I tend to put that moment right before the end of the scene. While this can create tension at certain points in the story, ending each scene with a miniature cliff-hanger was getting boring halfway through the manuscript.

    What are your thoughts on placement of ‘high moments’ within scenes? Is it better to generally put them towards the end of a scene, or to vary throughout the story?

    Once again, thank you for helping me see the flaws in my writing. Now that I know what’s wrong, I can start fixing it.

    The Noveling Novice

    • cslakin June 26, 2014 at 6:05 am #

      Glad this is helping! Scene structure is crucial and is usually a fatal flaw in a manuscript. Hence, why it’s a pillar of construction!

  5. Jean Willett July 2, 2014 at 8:03 am #

    I have your new book and love it! It’s clarifying and answering questions I’ve had in the past. Now, I’m starting a bigger project and its organization will be so much better after reading all your Pillars of construction blogs. Thanks for sharing.

    • cslakin July 2, 2014 at 8:22 am #

      Thanks so much, Jean. I hope the book really helps you write great novels. And if you feel so inclined, put a review up on Amazon. That helps a lot!

  6. Joe Brewer July 2, 2014 at 4:00 pm #

    As always, great information and very timely. I’m editing my mss and noticed some scenes were either weak, too long, or out of place. Your posts on scenes always helps me straighten them out. Thanks!

  7. Keith Keller May 20, 2018 at 5:51 am #

    Even though I have read a couple of your books, I’m just now discovering this site. It is amazing! I’m curious about your caution to flashbacks and how Pat Conroy toggles back and forth in Prince of Tides. How would you describe what he does well (or not) according to what you are cautioning against in this post and other post? Thanks!!

    • cslakin May 20, 2018 at 6:24 am #

      Hi Keith, that’s a great question. It takes a truly expert writer to structure a novel the way he did and pull it off. The Prince of Tides is one of my favorite novels of all time. I do wonder, however, if he’d written this book in this century, if he’d be able to pull it off and get published (plus, he was already a very successful novelist). Meaning, packing a novel full of backstory that plays out in long, full scenes is risky because of the way it stops the present action of the story and jerks readers into the past, disrupting the flow of the plot. But his character’s situation is one in which he is essentially in the “present” talking about past events that formed the present: his growing up in Colleton, his family, and all the events that led to his sister having a total metal breakdown. It works like a mystery, unfolding the clues, as he seeks to help Savannah break through. I don’t think many writers could pull it off so well, and I don’t know whether such a book/structure would be as well received today in that form as it was decades ago. Your thoughts?

      • Keith Keller May 20, 2018 at 9:10 am #

        I liked Prince of Tides as well as the The Great Santini. Same with A Thousand Acres. Two great writers who have inspired me to write the novel that’s been in my head for, well.. probably after reading Prince of Tides over 10 years ago. I might need to go back to the drawing board with much of what I have written so far. Thanks for your thoughts! Your site is an incredible service.

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